Thursday, February 26, 2009

ALLUSION POEM

I am defined by my reputation
I am no stranger, but a friend
I seek for peace and not war
Although others say i'm like a rotten core
Dealing with this burden
Makes me we want to feel respected
I take that chance to break open
To show them the truth
To have them realize
They are all just fools

I am now doubted by some,
But trusted by many.

2 comments:

MeganClaire. said...

Aloha Bestfriend.
:)

Since I know you very well this poem compliments the way you are around others. Such as seeking for peace not war, I know you try your best to keep everybody in tact.

Your last two lines,
"I am now doubted by some,
but trusted by many."
Really deep, I get a feel that regardless of what others think you don't let it get past you, or phase you. Which is a good thing.


Although, I can't seem to figure out the allusion behind it all. Maybe I just need to read more into other mythological allusions.

I know you tried explaining it me in class, and I forgot the name. I remember it dealt with "war."


Overall, it was a good draft.
:] Good job bestfriend.


-meganclaire.

lsueoka said...

HI Ariel,

Like Megan, I can't figure out the allusion. Because the purpose of the assignment is to show your understanding of how allusion works to communicate, I think you need to add details that will make your allusion clearer.

Also, don't forget the graphic that is part of the assignment.

mrs s